Tue Jul 07, 2009 12:54 pm Post
Tue Jul 07, 2009 12:58 pm Post
Thu Jul 16, 2009 7:27 pm Post
The way I figure it you got the short straw when God was letting souls pick their fathers. This assumes that you had a choice, probably not. Either way I really am glad I didn’t have me as a dad. But you did. Sorry about that.
Thu Jul 16, 2009 8:47 pm Post
SeanC wrote:The first line of my next book (current WIP) is:
The Deceiver had not yet arrived, but the multitudes preceded him and Jackson Square was packed.
Thu Jul 16, 2009 9:29 pm Post
Jaysen wrote:"The way I figure it you got the short straw when God was letting souls pick their fathers. This assumes that you had a choice, probably not. Either way I really am glad I didn’t have me as a dad. But you did. Sorry about that."
Thu Jul 16, 2009 9:50 pm Post
gr wrote:If the souls are pulling straws, they are in a lottery, not choosing among fathers. So, 'short straw' and 'picking their fathers' seem in tension here, likewise 'assumes you had a choice'.
Hewing too closely to the when-God-was-handing-out-the-fathers saying takes more words than it pays. Find the shortest path to link 'short straw' and 'father' and that will do it.
P.S. If you want my advice, I think no one here should take my advice on anything.
Consider your father. Sucks to be you.
Thu Jul 16, 2009 10:53 pm Post
Jaysen wrote:Tension is … good?
The lottery feel was intentional. If you are "choosing" then you might choose badly. Hence the short straw.
Point taken. I figure I can probably sum it up adequately withConsider your father. Sucks to be you.
Actually I kind of like that.
Fri Jul 17, 2009 12:58 am Post
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