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Mon Mar 12, 2007 7:05 pm Post

spinningdoc wrote:
Although in a forum about Hollywood screenwriting


Which this isn't.


Tis now :D

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Mon Mar 12, 2007 7:07 pm Post

Over sexed, overpaid, over formatted.

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Mon Mar 12, 2007 7:15 pm Post

Crikey.

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Mon Mar 12, 2007 9:12 pm Post

spinningdoc wrote:Over sexed, overpaid, over formatted.


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KB wrote:Crikey.


Three GUNSHOTS ring out and KEITH falls to the floor.

KEITH: Nnnghh.

He DIES.

NEWBIE (O.O.V.): Jeepers. Now you've done it.

ANGLE on the NEWBIE and the DELUDED OLD HACK.

DELUDED OLD HACK: Nuts. We didn't need him anyway.

NEWBIE: You mean--

DELUDED OLD HACK: Yeah. Do it ourselves. Got a computer my own. How hard can it be?

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Tue Mar 13, 2007 7:06 pm Post

I couldn't even read that dialogue, Michael, it wasn't formatted correctly.
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Tue Mar 13, 2007 7:39 pm Post

Must be from the Beeb. Formatted like a stage play, and they gave a groan as a line of dialogue. :D

Although normally, wouldn't the gunshots and death happen O.S., followed by a lot of handwringing and talking? :wink:
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Wed Mar 14, 2007 11:29 am Post

popcornflix wrote:Must be from the Beeb. Formatted like a stage play, and they gave a groan as a line of dialogue. :D


It wasn't a generic groan. It was a specific groan. I say specific groans are dialogue.

Although normally, wouldn't the gunshots and death happen O.S., followed by a lot of handwringing and talking? :wink:


There was a BBC training film with Lance Percival and Roy Kinnear on how to write for the new-fangled television, as opposed to writing for The Films.

They showed a clip from Zulu with the Zulus massing on the skyline and stamping their war-song. Then Kinnear comes on. "This is how we do the same thing for the tele-visi-on."

Cut to:

INT. TENT - DAY

Roy and Lance. Lance pokes his head out of the tent-flap, then brings it back in again with look of terrible alarm and dismay on his face.

ROY: What? What is it?

LANCE: There's ten thousand Zulus, massing on the skyline.

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Wed Mar 14, 2007 12:47 pm Post

Nice story. :D

When I started in current affairs TV, quite complex ideas often had to be described over generic library film. Sometimes they still are (see Adam Curtis's The Trap currently on BBC2).

The existence of the library images themselves and any accompanying sound couldn't be researched, but had to be guessed at, because there was no time. But of course there was - probably still is - a useful script shorthand for such circumstances:

FX FX FX

- a kind of factual equivalent of Lance Percival's fictional head round the tent flap.

Thus a London bus, a riot in Gaza, and the apocalypse - all:

FX FX FX

(The general public believe that these letters can be articulated as:

Effects Effects Effects

But at least in our office they were always:

Fux Fux Fux)

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Wed Mar 14, 2007 1:36 pm Post

LANCE: There's ten thousand Zulus, massing on the skyline.


A technique still approved of by Doctors although it tends to be Brummies, not Zulus.