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Mon Dec 03, 2012 6:19 pm Post

charlie.stross wrote:((Three guesses what the novel's about. Hint: begins with a "v"!))

The vehicular viability of viaducts? Vino & veritas? Vicarious vacations? Voles?
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Mon Dec 03, 2012 6:37 pm Post

Now I'm vexed.
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Mon Dec 03, 2012 7:27 pm Post

Siren wrote:
charlie.stross wrote:((Three guesses what the novel's about. Hint: begins with a "v"!))

Voles?


Imagine the pitch: "Twilight crossed with Wind in the Willows."
'Listen, some quiet night, when you've shirked your work that day. Do you hear
that distant, almost inaudible clicking sound? That's one of your
competitors, working away in the night in
Paris or London or Erie, PA.'

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Mon Dec 03, 2012 7:41 pm Post

Hugh wrote:
Siren wrote:
charlie.stross wrote:((Three guesses what the novel's about. Hint: begins with a "v"!))

Voles?


Imagine the pitch: "Twilight crossed with Wind in the Willows."


There is nothing half so worth doing as messing about with blood.

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Mon Dec 03, 2012 8:04 pm Post

V wrote:But on this most auspicious of nights, permit me then, in lieu of the more commonplace soubriquet, to suggest the character of this dramatis persona. Voila! In view humble vaudevillian veteran, cast vicariously as both victim and villain by the vicissitudes of fate. This visage, no mere veneer of vanity, is a vestige of the “vox populi” now vacant, vanished. However, this valorous visitation of a bygone vexation stands vivified, and has vowed to vanquish these venal and virulent vermin, van guarding vice and vouchsafing the violently vicious and voracious violation of volition.

The only verdict is vengeance; a vendetta, held as a votive not in vain, for the value and veracity of such shall one day vindicate the vigilant and the virtuous.

Verily this vichyssoise of verbiage veers most verbose, so let me simply add that it’s my very good honour to meet you and you may call me V.
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Mon Dec 03, 2012 8:20 pm Post

AmberV wrote:
V wrote: ... and you may call me V.

Are you, like, a crazy person?
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Mon Dec 03, 2012 8:21 pm Post

:twisted:
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Mon Dec 03, 2012 8:30 pm Post

(I have to own up to Googling that... it rang a bell, but I couldn't place it! :wink: )
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Tue Dec 04, 2012 4:25 pm Post

AmberV wrote:
V wrote: ... and you may call me V.


"My name is V; Amber V." :lol:

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Tue Dec 04, 2012 5:42 pm Post

BraVo!
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Tue Dec 04, 2012 7:49 pm Post

Praise be to all the saints, that it isn't Vic-k :shock: :shock:
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He was the last man on Earth. Then he heard a knock at his door.

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Mon Jan 07, 2013 4:45 pm Post

My new novel begins with this:


That night, she dreamed about a toothy monster with claws for fingers, huge and scarier than the cute ones on Sesame Street. Kassy ran to Mommy and Daddy, but they weren’t in their room. The telenovelas were over and the gray haired man who told the news was frowning. When the TV was on mute at night, Mommy was helping Daddy close up the bodega on the first floor. Even if scared, Kassy was supposed to tiptoe so that the neighbors wouldn’t complain about her running up and down the stairs. The door from the hallway to the storeroom was unlocked. The ceiling lights buzzed and hissed. Kassy was about to call Mommy when she heard voices. She wasn’t supposed to interrupt Mommy and Daddy when they were helping customers. She waited behind a stack of boxes next to the metal shelves, but the voices were unfriendly. She peeked.

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Tue Jan 08, 2013 10:08 pm Post

zubingarda wrote:He was the last man on Earth. Then he heard a knock at his door.


certainly an interesting premise to kick off a story with. it,s always good to set peoples expectations firmly in one direction and then set a little wobble. the premise asks a lot of questions...
- how did he get to be the last man on earth
- is there a last woman
- there are still plenty of cats, though, right
- what is knocking on his door
- how different a world is this to the one i live in
- why would the knocker want to contact this last person
- did the last man know he was the last man
- is the last man meant to be literal, in a girlfriend in a coma kind of way, semi-literal in a i am legend kind of way, or figurative in a he-is-in-an-emotional-place-where-he-feels-like-the-last-man-alive kind of way

so all in all, if you have the next line, and the next... etc... then not a bad idea to start with.

i would encourage you to look at a great piece of work which handles this kind of a set-a-indisputable-premise-and-then-dispute-it really well... a christmas carol by charlie dickens
that is one of my favourite pieces of comedy writing, and - despite being only a short story really - devotes the first 37 lines to explaining just how dead marley is. in other words, it really goes to an effort to sell the premise before it pulls back from it.

what i,m trying to say here, is that although the premise is good, the bluntness feels like you,re writing the tagline for the movie poster, rather than the book itself.
i am happy to give feedback on short passages.

be warned, though. my feedback can be blunt... always well intentioned and aimed at helping you improve, but possibly more honest than you are used to.

as such, i will only chip in if directly invited.