Sun May 19, 2013 6:52 pm Post
Tue May 21, 2013 3:07 pm Post
Wed May 22, 2013 12:20 am Post
Floss wrote:my overarching comments here would be...
- better to effect an introduction to characters / pesonalities through action than a purely scene setting scene. airtime is a precious commodity in a movie - even more so on a tv show - so you have to squeeze everything you can out of every exchange. this feels too long for too little pay off in terms of the plot. i,m not saying cut this scene, i,m saying if at all possible, make sure that there is something vital to the main story arc in here, and make sure the viewer would recognise it as such.
- be careful of expositional dialogue. dante would know a pr12 and a gl42 but needs to be told that acr1287 is an accounts receivable
- the more technical the subject matter the more careful you need to be to avoid technospeak. i,d avoid making your characters sound intelligent and skilled by giving them a vocacbulary that the viewer doesn't.
Wed May 22, 2013 1:08 pm Post
Robert_S wrote:Ok, I've thought of putting him on his feet and multitasking several crisis at a time, but from my experience in an IT crisis center, you're on your butt the majority of time.
Sun May 26, 2013 2:25 am Post
Robert_S wrote:A 25x10' room. Computer stations are placed against both walls along the length. Ten people, five on each side, each with headsets, handle IT problems for the company while DANTE oversees from his station.
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